my character (W.I.P)

by **Luster** Mon Apr 08, 2019 9:43 pm

Type of Character: Dragon
Personal Info
Name: Luster
Alias: Glow or Sunrise
Age: 8 years old
Gender: Female
Personality: She is the happy go lucky kind of dragon. She is always bounding about the village with her smile that is aglow with happiness! She is very enthusiastic about everything, and always hates training, with a burning passion!
Fears: She fears death, for herself and close friends. She also fears battles because she doesn't like to hurt people.
Strengths: She is very good at flying and making friends. Her enthusiastic charm always puts a smile on everyone's face. She is very smart, but tends not to show it.
Weaknesses: She is not that good at using her special powers. She also needs be able to battle other dragons and put up a good fight.

General Appearance
Height: 5 feet
Scales: Yellow all over and some orange scattered across her scales. She has a few yellow horns starting at her head and going down into the neck. She also has a few white speckles near and on her wings and a white underbelly.
Eyes: Light orange.
Appearance: She has a small satchel around her waist. That is all she wears.

Tribe Information and Status
Tribe: Starlight Order
Inheritance: 30% Lightwing/70% Skywing
Rank: Hatchling
Family: N/A. Family is dead. She did have parents, but she was a hatchling at the time. She doesn't remember them.
Mate: N/A
Hatchlings: N/A

Skills and Abilities
Normal Abilities: Can shoot (very weak) condensed light beams and (better than 1-69% Skywing, but still weak) electricity. She can't camouflage because she is not a high enough percentage Lightwing. She can fly faster than normal, at 75 mph, but not as fast as a purebred Skywing.
Special Abilities: Hasn't figured them out yet.
Combat Style: She likes not to fight in particular, but if she has to, she goes all brute force, tackling the opponent onto the ground, making them unable to get up under her weight (she tries but she is not the heaviest dragon). Then she attacks with her claws and teeth. Her strategy mainly fails.

Background
History: Mother and father were killed by an attacking tribe of Nightwings far from home. She was forced to live in the jungle by herself for years, until found by her fellow Lightwings, and was brought to the village.

by **Baldirak Sapiens Draco** Tue Apr 09, 2019 11:27 am

Hi, there. So I see you have her rank as Trainee. But what kind of Trainee?

She can't camouflage yet. So is she kind of young? I mean you have her as 21 years old, but is she 21 like a human and an adult, or 21 like a dragon and you consider that to be like a teen? I ask not only because of her being unable to use one of her natural abilities yet, but because of her height. Firstly, the max height for a LightWing is 50ft. Second, if you are wanting her to be the max height, then she would be an adult. So if that's the case, then maybe you should explain why she can't camouflage yet, since it is an ability that should come naturally to her.

Let me know when you've finished editing and if you have any questions.

by **Luster** Tue Apr 09, 2019 6:55 pm

Sorry, this is my first time. I am diving into new waters and messed a couple things up! I'll fix it! Smile

by **Baldirak Sapiens Draco** Tue Apr 09, 2019 11:22 pm

That's quite alright.

by **Luster** Wed Apr 10, 2019 1:26 pm

I fixed what errors I could find. I hope this is good enough! Smile

I also am thinking about changing the picture to my profile picture and making her Skywing/Lightwing hybrid! Do you have to make it you? If so I'll edit those few things!

by **Baldirak Sapiens Draco** Wed Apr 10, 2019 5:00 pm

Okay, so her new age is six years old. At this age, her rank should be Hatchling and 31ft would still be too big. She'd be more like 4-7ft tall.

For Tribe, while the two tribes are merged, it is called the Starlight Order.

Under inheritance, can you include what percentage of each species she is? For example, 50% LightWing, 50% SkyWing. This will help with determining your abilities.

As far as your profile picture, typically, it does reflect what your character looks like, so that way other people can have an idea of what your character looks like without having to look at your character app.

by **Luster** Fri Apr 12, 2019 12:24 pm

Fixed what I could find

by **Baldirak Sapiens Draco** Fri Apr 12, 2019 12:50 pm

Okay. So her lightning breath wouldn't quite be "normal" It would be weak as well, weaker than a purebred SkyWing, but stronger than a 1-69% SkyWing hybrid. Also, since she is just a Hatchling, her abilities would be weak anyway. How fast can she fly? Keep in mind that the max flight speed for a purebred SkyWing (that isn't dedicated to speed), is 120mph (and also the being a Hatchling thing).

Sorry if this seems like a lot of fixing things. It's just that the abilities portion of a character app should be detailed enough so other people can have a good idea of what your character can do, especially if you end up in a combat rp.

by **Luster** Sat Apr 13, 2019 8:00 pm

Okay, I did my best and corrected what you told me as much as I could. There is probably more to correct though. Inform me of any errors please! Very Happy

by **Baldirak Sapiens Draco** Sun Apr 14, 2019 9:23 am

Well, you still had that she was a Trainee instead of a Hatchling, but I changed it for you. This looks good now. Approved!

by **Baldirak Sapiens Draco** Tue May 28, 2019 7:12 pm

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